Once there were two girls. Their names were Charlse and Sam. One day they were looking for a spot to camp
in the forest. They had a tent, some
food and water. They found a good spot
to put up their tent. It was under a
tree. Then they worked together to put
their tent up.
After they had eaten they went to sleep inside their
tent. But in the middle of the night a
loud storm woke them up. They heard
thunder and they saw lightening in the sky.
There was a lot of heavy rain coming down on their tent. They were very scared! It was a very bad storm.
They said, “Let’s get out of here”. The river had risen with all the heavy rain, so
the girls had to swim to safety. When
they got back on land they walked to a hall where there were a lot of other
people taking shelter from the storm.
Later their mum and dad came to get them. They decided to always check the weather
forecast before camping in the forest again.
Hi Sydney-Rayne, you have a nice story and I like all your paragraphs and sentences because they are logically sequenced.
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ReplyDeleteThis is an amazing story. I liked how you used who, what, where and when. Keep up the good work:)